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Nigel Code, Author's avatar

That is a fine story, wonderfully written, thank you.

There are a couple of corrections you may wish to make:

There’s always a night where he roses do not close. he > the

The miller did not touch her when he arrived at her side, knelt down and kindly pulled her up, but it was know that he would later. know > known

Once a proofreader, always a proofreader.

Eugenia P. Frankenberg 🌻's avatar

your writing here is so poignant and eerie. i love the use of repeating images and statements, like the girls always seeing the mill and therefore cannot be saved. this was dark. it’s saying something about girlhood that many people would rather look away from (both men & women); that it’s brutal, that some of us get trapped forever. it also speaks to our scariest dreams as women. evocative and powerfully written.

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